Hi Scott,
I have the same Dailey dry sump system on my LS3.
Your setup lookes as recommended, with the exeption of the lines from the valve covers to breather tank. I have a vaccuum regulator on the valve cover iso the lines.
The scavange part of the pump is pulling a lot air so your -AN 6 lines lookes a little small.
Or is it maybe due to emission you are routing the lines as in the drawing?